You Have No Right To LiveYou Have No Right To Live:
Okay, let's go through this systematically, category-by-category.
Vision: I love how you've used different font sizes to show the insulter's growing displeasure, and how the victim's voice in the end is "overpowered" by the other's anger.
Originality: I'm blown away by how well this is executed, especially with the font sizing! I've never seen anyone do anything like this before, and you pulled it off brilliantly!
Technique: Very well done here, and I like how you've done a traditional first-person perspective but put a spin on it.
Impact: This piece hits very close to the heart, and you can feel the emotion behind the victim's words, as his/her hope slowly drains away from the constant beating.
Overall: A very beautiful piece, and I hope to see more in this style in the future.
Thank you so much for the critique ^^ Unfortunately there is one thing I cannot fulfill.
This particular style is only useable for this particular type of poem as it was created to show that difference, I fear this may be the only one of its kind (Unless I can find something suitably similar), however I am glad you enjoyed it.
-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates